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Awakening Page11 by EnvySkort Awakening Page11 by EnvySkort
And here we are, the final page of this little story and the tweest my fiance and I collaborated on in a sense. 

To back things up a bit, I was brainstorming like crazy a few months ago for a story and wasn't coming up with much until my fiance suggested I take an allegory and run with it.  In this case, we decided to go for an allegory of fighting for one's life once faced with the prospect of possible ensuing death. 

In his run-ins with death, Ren's only salvation came from the interventions, urgings, and support of his family and physician, and the strength he drew from them in the end.  Spoiler alert, yeah.  You got this far, so I'm sure you were able to put together that much!

Either way, that's the end of the story.  Again, not as powerful as the Kingdom of Akemi, but a welcome little experiment in practicing with story-telling, panel-planning, and background/detail practice.  So even if it doesn't place, it's still here for you all to read.

Any constructive criticism is welcome, because if I do this next year, I REALLY want to knock the ball out of the park!

Thanks for reading, guys!  You're great!
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KithiaIsTheVillian Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014
So that's why Miss Hiira's staff was the Caduceus! Nice touch!

I really enjoyed reading the story, and the ending was pitch perfect! (And quite unexpected as well.) I can't wait for next year's comic!
X-I-L2048 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I gotta say, the ending to this was a complete surprise to me. I thought is was just a generic but well-drawn comic about the usual "boy has a destiny to save the land accompanied by a band of stalwart companions" story, but I must confess, this ending panel makes the whole comic a LOT more meaningful. =D Well done! I loved all the character designs and the varied panels, too.
jdp218 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2014
this is pretty sweet!
Wisetria Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Very well done! Clap  One question though. Is their a page limit? If not, I felt like page 5 was a tad too wordy. Maybe spreading out the wording would help. 
EnvySkort Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014
Yeah, the page limit is 12 pages; 1 for Cover, 11 for story.

And I agree, page 5 was heavy on exposition.  Thanks for the constructive criticism, I truly appreciate it.
Wisetria Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Sure thing!
SilentDecepticon Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014
This was a fun read.  Well done.
NIELSPETERDEJONG Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014
This was amazing! Thanks so much for sharing, this has been epic on so many ways ^_^
TigerLilly9 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Student General Artist
wow! you did an awesome job!! i love your story's!
Rose-Hunter Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Good story.
Foxbear Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
SO sweet and wonderful. :)
OKami-hu Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

It's pretty cool, probably not 'not as powerful', but different from the previous one. And I really hope the tendency will continue with more touchy, darker subjects.
EnvySkort Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014
Yeah, definitely not as strong as the story from last year.  Welp.  I've got an entire year to come up with something better than the two I've done.

I guess I'll start brainstorming on other possible subjects.
Guiled-Dragon Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Professional General Artist
Given your other work I should have expected a link-to reality ending like this but I was surprised! And I loved it! I love the twists you do from reality to another and I think it's beautiful! Especially with something like this :)
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